Although my critique is tailored to M&B Romance all the advice I've been given is relevent (imo) to most genres.
Facts to remember:
- In a character-driven story the plot needs to be constructed around the hero and heroine.
- What events are going to happen to push them into facing their demons?
- What events are going to create conflict and resolution for these characters?
I think you have done this to a certain extent, carefully foreshadowing events that have a later pay-off, but I think you need to go deeper into the emotioonal conflict between your hero and heroine and construct your plot around this.